i. The message type is persuasive, and the approach adopted is direct. ii. Six weaknesses from the document include; the letterhead is not well centralised, No date, salutation is not complete; no name and postion well placed, No subject line for the letter, no good will close, the complimentary close is wrong, instead of your faithfully he used yours sincerely. iii. Six weaknesses in the organisation of the letter are: the author used a direct approach instead of routine/positive approach, the main ideas are clear but no convincing enough, the details and major points are not clearly stated to catch the eyes of the reader, the attention is not there, the theme is not well expanded to create interest to the reader.
Though action is specific, but not well presented. Six negative weaknesses in writing styles: many spelling errors, repetition of same words, wrong spelling of the receiver’s name, wrong us of bracket, instead of parenthesis. , no good paragraphs. no title for the document, no date, the letter is full of many spelling errors, many repetitions, no sharp and good concluding sentence, the gap from the ending of the salutation and the name of the sender is too much. Timeless Jewelry77 Sunset BlvdHocina, NSW02 76553625-9-2010Joan Smith14 Janlor Drive Melbourne 2001 Grand Opneing Sale—Don’t Miss itDear Joan, Its Melbourne’s newest and trendiest jewellery store’s first ever sale.
With hour rushed opening in November, ‘you know how late suppliers and tradesman can be! !!!! ’ it's now time for our "Grand Opening Sale" It's a little late, but as they say better latte than never. Our Sale to the general public commences on Wednesday morning at 9.00am. But you will be at the head of the news.
This is your very own special invitation to be one of the first at our first ever sale and all stock is half price. We know you need to feel important so here is you’re chance. Our new store is very unique and so is our very affordable Jewellery, don't miss this fantastic opportunity to allow us to introduce you to something surprise special in Jewellery and all at the basement bargain deal of the century at 50% off Were not holding back, first impressions last, and we are certain, that you will love our delectable, succulrnt, sparkling and inviting range of jewellery, so beat the rush, beat your friends and grab a timeless jewelry bargain Joan, on Tuesday the 20th of November, you and your friends will have the chance to purchase 50% OFF jewellery and watches, prior to the general public on the following morning It's important to bring this letter with you, only those customers who bring this letter with them, get first bite of the cherry at our remarkable new lines.
So do not lose or forget this letter or you’ll just be watching your friends snap up all bargain bring we have. I look forward to seeing you in our Melbourne store. For you convenience, we have also extended our hours for you until 7.00pm on Monday evening. So if you’re boss is mean enough to make you work late or you are stuck with the kids you are still in with a chance.